Does this make sense???





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Discus: What Are My Chances?: January 2004 Archive: Does this make sense???
By Richitalwar79 (Richitalwar79) on Saturday, January 10, 2004 - 05:48 pm: Edit

How can i rephrase this sentence to make sense? It sounds weird.

Learning, like life, is an inveterate journey through which man attempts to acquire the best of all that is available to him.

By Soozievt (Soozievt) on Saturday, January 10, 2004 - 06:40 pm: Edit

I would scrap it all together, sorry! It is not that it needs rephrasing. It just needs total redoing. First, if this is for a college essay, do not talk about "man", but talk about yourself. Also, what do you mean about "acquiring the best available"? The best what? What does the best have to do with anything? That is not what learning is really about. I really do not even know what your point is. And using "inveterate" seems just a little bit too much trying to use a big word, considering the rest of the sentence is not all that sophisticated.
Susan


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