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By Mehere (Mehere) on Friday, August 06, 2004 - 05:51 pm: Edit

This poem was written for my English Literature class. Therefore, if i were to send this to any admissions office, i will take things out and edit it thoroughly. But this is just a rough idea of what the finished poem will look like. Would you recommend sending something like this as a supplement 'essay'? I can change the content if any of you think that would be a better idea. But i just like this idea of sending something this sort. I'd love to hear your opinion on this. By the way, my name is Xin, so that might help you with the humourous references.

An Ivy League Admission Officer to A Passionate Student:

To accept you into our school,
Be true with me for Iím no fool;
If you shall cheat and lie to me,
Your heart will not be filled with glee.

High scores and marks I hope you hold,
They are vital, as youíve been told;
But the marks snagged or caught by chance
May look promising at first glance.

In teams and clubs you should engage
Your time and will without a wage;
Volunteering for the public,
Working here and there just like Nick.

Other qualities you should bear,
We seek attributes that are rare,
To make you stand out from the crowd,
Nerds like Mark will not be allowed.

Listen to your English teacher,
We donít want to be your preacher;
Follow the rules and do not sin,
For you will end up just like Xin.

If all these standards you have met,
Make sure that you are not in debt;
To accept you into our school,
Be true with me for Iím no fool.


The Cunning Studentís Reply
to the Admission Officer:

Dear sir, from you I wish to find
The key to what is on my mind;
A way to go to Ivy League,
To please my heart and you intrigue.

High marks and test scores I behold
In the hardest course Iíve enrolled;
My performance is consistent
In every class, Iím persistent.


Teams and clubs I have created
For both school and fun related;
I have gone to no end nor rest,
To volunteer and do my best.

I am unique as you will see,
Family not mere bourgeoisie,
Captain of football and swim team,
Time to study Iíd never dream.

AP English, Math, and Science,
Member of student alliance,
Rules and laws I try to obey,
Boasting is wrong to my dismay.

Lead my way to the Ivy League,
To please my heart and you intrigue,
Father will pay you full and well,
If you will promise not to tell.


The Admission Officerís Reply to the Beguiling Student

Were gold priceless and time endless,
Then I might accept you costless
To any school you'd want to go,
But never knew you'd sink so low.

Fair scores foul came, grades bought with gold,
Your ruse, lies before me unfold,
Appalled I am at your avow,
You know that lies Iíll not allow.

Teams and clubs, sports and volunteer,
Not for fun but goals insincere;
But, had your words been true and fair,
I might admit you anywhere.

You are unique as I should know,
Unique just like Wacko Jacko;
You'd never dream as I am sure,
Like Bush's heart, you're never pure.

AP Courses no doubt you're in,
Adapted Programs, just like Xin;
You've never lied as I shall see,
Then eyes I have none, you agree?

To Ivy League you will not go,
Not even for a quid pro quo;
But, were gold priceless, time endless,
Then Ivy League wouldíve been costless.

By Dadofsam (Dadofsam) on Friday, August 06, 2004 - 06:15 pm: Edit

In a word: No. Admissions officers won't have the time to read it, and trying to be humorous on paper can backfire for anyone.

By Cruella (Cruella) on Saturday, August 07, 2004 - 12:07 am: Edit

Nope! I would never suggest you send this to any school. Sorry.

By Mehere (Mehere) on Saturday, August 07, 2004 - 12:37 am: Edit

hrmm.. i see...
Why do you think it is a bad idea?

What if i change the middle poem to things I DID in high school, instead of a sterotypical high school student who does things for college but not for his own liking? and i will change the last poem to me getting admitted and not rejected. Do you think that might be a better idea for in the middle, i show more about myself rather than sarcastically mock those who do things just to get into college?

By Spoonyj (Spoonyj) on Saturday, August 07, 2004 - 12:40 am: Edit

When you're tempted to include "supplemental" materials, remember what the admissions officers say: "The thicker the file, the thicker the student."

By Mini (Mini) on Saturday, August 07, 2004 - 12:51 am: Edit

If you think this is the best possible representation of yourself, send it.

I wouldn't, but then it doesn't represent me, or how I would want to present myself to the world.

(I also don't like it, but that's neither here nor there.)

By Elizabeth22 (Elizabeth22) on Saturday, August 07, 2004 - 10:07 am: Edit

Don't send it. It'll hurt your application far more than it'll help it.


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