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By Wulfffish (Wulfffish) on Friday, June 04, 2004 - 07:02 pm: Edit

I don't like this sample much, any advice, also what would you give it as a mark.

The prompt: "The greatest griefs are those we cause ourselves" == and then it asks for an example to support of disagree.

THe Essay:

Character is often represented as a funtion of biological processes beyond human control. As a result, many people have a tendency to blame their griefs, problems, and issues on a primal instinct or whim. Many people believe that this is an escape mechanism, and indeed it is. However in another sense this sort of thought is valid. There are numerous factors that are outside of human control that contribute to the stockpile of personal grief. This is why I believe that character is actually a component of immediate circumstance.

For example, in Joseph Heller's novel "Catch 22", Yossarian, the young pilot, is trapped in a system where everything has a consequence that negates its benefit. Surely, this character is not causitive in his own problems. Such systems work to condition people into a state of torturous hopelessness in which they turn against themselves, and over to their commanders.

The greatest griefs are not the product of the individual. Instead, they are the effects of a troubled system on the human character.

By Wulfffish (Wulfffish) on Friday, June 04, 2004 - 07:32 pm: Edit


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