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OK, on the common app., this is what I'm putting for the "most meaningful activity" part:

I remember the time—perhaps two or three months ago—when Miss Maria complimented me on the help I gave to one of the more obstinate students in the homework room. Every time I walk out the door, she thanks me for coming, but that little incident and others like it have shown me that I’m actually good at working with the children there. Volunteering at West End has been meaningful to me because, besides helping me to realize even more how much I enjoy teaching, it’s also shown me that it might be a viable career option.

Any suggestions? Is it too...conventional? Common?

By Daggerlee (Daggerlee) on Thursday, January 01, 2004 - 11:36 pm: Edit

Get rid of the last sentence, it's much too boring and blah. Elaborate more on the actual experience of helping the child. Flesh it out; show, don't tell. "Viable career option" just sounds stuffy; something much better is "I might consider teaching some day, because of that kid." Good luck