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| By Lilpopers (Lilpopers) on Wednesday, December 31, 2003 - 03:32 am: Edit |
Can you please look at my essay. The prompt was to write what you want so I did. Feel free to be as harsh as possible.
Dear Reader,
Everyone has always told me to go to college in order to gain a better life. And I planned on doing just that, graduating from high school and going straight to college. However my senior year of high school didn’t turn out exactly how I planned. I never expected Pep Rallies and Proms complete with puffy dresses however I also never expected for one of my friends to die or to suffer the loss of my uncle shortly there after. But this is not a story of sadness or loss, but one of perseverance. As the May 1st college notification deadline approached I knew that I wasn’t ready to go. There was something in my heart that told me that now wasn’t the time, however at the same time I was confronted with the same people who had guided me through high school telling me that college was the best path for me. I knew that taking a year off was the best thing for me so that is what I did.
During the summer I helped to create a documentary detailing the pollution in the hunter’s point shipyard of San Francisco. Once school started I volunteered my services to help one of my best friends plan our Fall Leadership Conference with my main part being to help with the presentation skills workshop. When the time for the leadership conference came I was happy, my number one piece of advice was to make all presentations fun and original and we showcased this to the workshop participants by having them come up with skits to demonstrate the things that they had learned. By the end of the workshop we were all laughing hysterically at the variety of skits that people had managed to come up with in such a short period of time. And by the end of the day I felt like I was back into the groove of things. The week following I began to work my network calling up everyone I knew and explaining what had happened and asking if they needed any help in their organization or if there was any way I could pitch in. I ended up speaking at a couple of conferences and helping to teach at a Youth Research, Evaluation and Planning seminars. To my surprise I was hired at both Macy’s and Gap. I never thought that I would find myself folding clothes at the Gap or helping people find comforters at Macys, but I find that you experience in life is meant for some reason. Just the other day I helped a woman pick out a blanket for a child she was in the process of adopting. It is not the same feeling as curing a sick child or helping to build a school house in some foreign land, but it is still an opportunity in which to make someone’s day a bit brighter. I am happy where I am now and I know that I am better person and will be a better student as a result of taking a year off.
So reader as I told you in the beginning this is not a sad story or one of lost. Though there have been sad moments over this year I have found ways to make wonderful ones that makes the not so happy ones just a little bit easier to deal with I have found a way to put my heart into everything I do, from speaking at evaluation conferences to greeting a customer as they approach the register. This is not the end of the story but merely the beginning if you help to fulfill my wish of becoming a Brown student in the fall of 2004. (After all I can’t fold clothes forever).
| By Muzicgal04 (Muzicgal04) on Thursday, January 01, 2004 - 06:39 pm: Edit |
when is this due?
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