|By Ndbisme2 (Ndbisme2) on Sunday, November 23, 2003 - 05:25 pm: Edit|
Here's my unfinished, revised essay. I think it is missing some element. I need to rewrite this essay again. Do you guys like any parts of it?
Must the essay be (unless it is so specified) typed on an 8 1/2 x 11 page, double spaced, TNR? I was thinking of typing my essay in book format--one single paper, printed on both sides that when folded gives it a book feel.
Secondly, I'm not sure I am using the right tense for this essay. Should I use past or present?
|By Ndbisme2 (Ndbisme2) on Sunday, November 23, 2003 - 05:26 pm: Edit|
BTW--this essay is about my academic passion.
Is it / does it have Yale potential?
|By Jimjunior (Jimjunior) on Sunday, November 23, 2003 - 07:10 pm: Edit|
I like the anecdotal part, but the conclusion seems very basic. Mock Trial is a good topic, did your team perchance go to Nationals last year?
|By Ndbisme2 (Ndbisme2) on Sunday, November 23, 2003 - 07:24 pm: Edit|
I don't like what I have much. I have a great concept... I just need to work on it more. Any parts that you all think should definitely be sliced off or definitely kept?
|By Ndbisme2 (Ndbisme2) on Monday, November 24, 2003 - 06:05 pm: Edit|
Ndbisme2 is begging for help!
|By Crnchycereal (Crnchycereal) on Monday, November 24, 2003 - 06:18 pm: Edit|
The essay has potential. However, the conclusion really needs work. I suggest going with the anecdotal part, having a brief paragraph or two about what it means to you, and then really slam the readers with a conclusion that goes back to the anecdote. Better yet, you might try to make the ENTIRE essay an anecdote, subtley showing the readers how mock trial has affected you.
|By Ndbisme2 (Ndbisme2) on Monday, November 24, 2003 - 08:40 pm: Edit|
Me like, crnchycereal!
My last essay was nothing but annecdotal until the last two paragraphs. Ziggy told me, in different words, to show more of myself. What I am going to do is use more imagery and a real, concise explanation of the meaning at the end. I'm going to write this essay up tonight!
Thanks 4 all the help!
Do you guys recommend that I write this at the end of the essay: "For me, mock trial is life, the rest is... Objection, your Honor, relevance?"
|By Ndbisme2 (Ndbisme2) on Monday, November 24, 2003 - 08:47 pm: Edit|
Also... what tense do you all recommend? Present or past? I can't seem to decide. I've read some great essays that use the past tense that were great. Thanks again.
|By Ndbisme2 (Ndbisme2) on Tuesday, November 25, 2003 - 06:12 pm: Edit|
|By Ndbisme2 (Ndbisme2) on Tuesday, November 25, 2003 - 08:55 pm: Edit|
bump? beg-beg x 2
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