Submiting my UC Essays!





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By Eliel (Eliel) on Friday, November 21, 2003 - 08:56 pm: Edit

I am submiting my application today and need last minute advice on my UC essays!( I need to add more words to essay # 2, 3).
Thanks

#1
How have you taken advantage of the educational opportunities you have had to prepare for college?

Eudora Welty said, “Through travel I first became aware of the outside world; it was through travel that I found my own introspective way into becoming a part of it.” Not only have I taken many challenging courses offered to me, I have challenged myself leaving my comfort zone and traveled to France my junior year.
I fundraised and worked hard to earn my trip to France. On that trip I learned tremendously about another culture. I learned how similar and different another culture can be. I also learned about my culture and how we relate to one another. This trip I took to France will help me in college by providing me with tolerance and understanding of other philosophies.
I have also been taking language courses and this summer I began to learn Italian on my own. I am passionate about learning and exploring different cultures, languages and views of life. I strongly believe life is what happens to you while you're working towards your future.
I have always been motivated in everything I have done. I have taken the initiative in pursuing my education further by taking higher level challenging courses. “The rewards of a journey outweigh the gamble of leaving the harbor.”
Word Count:205

#2
Tells us about a talent, experience, contribution or personal qualities that you will bring to the University of California.

I had a life-changing experience the summer vacation of my sophomore year when I visited my father's birthplace, a rural village in Durango, Mexico. Before I visited, I always thought I was unfortunate because of my family’s financial circumstances. It was in Durango where I realized how well I actually live. I realized I was taking life in America for granted. On return, I had a different perspective about life.
This trip made me more compassionate. Link Crew is an organization in which I help freshmen become more familiar with high school. We make their transitions from middle school to high school more comfortable. This helped me with my experiences in Link Crew. Also, I have become involved more with my church. These events have transformed me into a better person. The experiences will help me in college where all students have different life experiences.
I have gained knowledge and wisdom. I have the drive to use my talents in a positive way to contribute to the community. More than anything, I will bring an open mind that will add to the vitality of the university.
word count:186
#3
Is there anything you would like us to know about you or your academic record that you have not had the opportunity to describe elsewhere in this application?

Like Margot Asquith said, “Although I am not stupid, the mathematical side of my brain is like dumb notes upon a damage piano.” Ever since grammar school I have struggled with math. I have always liked school and learning. I am confident with all schools subjects except math. As my academic record shows, math has been my weakest subject.
Ever since I was a young student, I would always be insecure and anxious when it came to math. Even in high school, I remember hoping the teacher would not call on me to go to the board to share my answer. I have even been criticized and laughed at. Some teachers have even overlooked me in math class. I used to think, "What do we need math for, if we are never going to use it?" This summer I availed myself of a math tutor. Having a tutor has changed my perspective and attitude on math, academics, and life. The more I have struggled with math the more I have come to realize that math is very important and impacts our daily lives, by making things easier and more efficient.
I used to contemplate giving up because of math and not asking for help. Every math course I have re-taken has helped me realize I could do it. I have come to realize that I could overcome my math difficulties, because I have first learned how to cope with it. I have learned to look at the problems from a different perspective and find solutions to them. I probably would have never gone through these rough times if I would have asked for help earlier in my academic career and if my family's financial hardship would have allowed getting supplementary help. The reason I never gave up and I have overcome these difficulties is because I have taken the initiative and sought a solution for what I believed previously had no solution. I did this by going to a math tutor.
I have also come to realize that I have many other talents in life and that my passion for learning means much. For example, learning about new languages, different cultures and being surrounded by diversity brings me to success and closer to my goals and dreams. It was especially important for me to overcome difficulties in math because I am the first college bound student in my whole family. This has made me work harder and not give up. I also wish to be considered for participation in EOP. This program will provide benefits to me in assisting me with better opportunities.
I have a strong determination to succeed academically. As many others give up, I stand up and stand out by taking risks and challenging myself to test my abilities. I am incredibly motivated and goal oriented and I am always goal-oriented. I never let my frail spots interfere with my goals. I have learned to persist, work hard and keep trying. Most importantly, I have learned not to discard opportunities no matter how insignificant they may seem, because all opportunities lead to a destiny in life. I am determined to better myself because it is the best kind of victory. With what I have learned, not just in high school, but my whole academic career, I know I will be successful in college and in the career I choose. I always tell myself: “If what I am working for really matters, I will give it all I’ve got.”
Word Count: 581


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