Creative piece (not finihsed) comment please

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By Y17k (Y17k) on Monday, October 06, 2003 - 09:58 am: Edit

hows the intro to my piece on betrayal.
this is obviously in context with joan of arc.


“Joan, you will be captured by the Enemy before midsummer? St. Catherine’s voice repeats itself verbatim over and over again. Tomorrow is midsummer, and today we have a battle. ‘Today is it? I think out aloud. “What?? La-Hir?grunts. As I turn to respond, I observe the group of men who are escorting me. There are enough scars on their faces to scare away even the Satan himself, yet their eyes are filled with anxiety of the forthcoming battle. “What??La-Hir?asks again, this time leaning over to make himself more audible. In doing so, he shifts his weight to one side, causing much discomfort to the horse that is being crushed under his gigantic figure. “Nothing?I respond back, sounding as vivacious as possible.

A few cantors later, I look around again. The proximity of my army makes me doubt for a split second of St. Catherine’s integrity, but a second later these disappear. ‘They have never deceived me before? I reassure myself. I chuckle at the paradox; I am relieved that I will be captured. A sudden dot appears on the horizon. A dot becomes a line. A line becomes a battalion of knights. A battalion of knights become an army. I look back onto my army, then at our enemy. I cannot count, but even I know their army is far superior in numbers. Even La-Hir? who is known for his intrepidness, stares at the army with trepidation. “Err... Joan? We need to retreat?
I give a nod, and moments later we are galloping back the Orleans.

By Y17k (Y17k) on Tuesday, October 07, 2003 - 06:11 am: Edit

comon guys this is due tomorrow and its already nearing ><

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